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Post by charity on Feb 21, 2005 23:58:10 GMT 1
I've not started this story yet but I have the character bases ready. This will be my new project and I vow to complete it! There will be two main stories taking place alongside each other which will eventually meet in one big climax.
The first story will consist of...
Carl Chas Terry Louise Matthew
The second story will include...
Viv Marlon Donna Paddy Emily
Look out for this starting soon!
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Post by eithne on Feb 22, 2005 23:28:07 GMT 1
Wow! I love the idea of having two stories which eventually come into one. I myself have been writing more of "Secrets" but I'm finding it a little difficult. I seem to have two/three month periods of being able to write and then not.
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Post by magenta635 on Feb 24, 2005 17:56:35 GMT 1
I second that CNB I look forward to reading it.
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Post by charity on Feb 24, 2005 18:24:52 GMT 1
I'll be starting this on Saturday!
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Post by loulou170388 on Feb 24, 2005 18:37:51 GMT 1
Can't wait to read!
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Post by charity on Feb 26, 2005 16:49:38 GMT 1
EPISODE 1
Terry is sat at the Woolpack bar, leisurely chatting with Louise who stands the opposite side, couting the spirits and mixers. The pub is extremely quiet with only two other people drinking at a corner table.
TERRY: So, what do you think? LOUISE: Oh I dunno Terry, I mean I loved running the B&B for a week but taking it over fulltime is a massive step! What if I got fed up of it? Or what if we both get fed up and then we're left with a big business we don't want to own! TERRY: Oh come on, you're just seeing the negatives. I know I wouldn't get bored, there's always stuff to do! I've not had a proper job since Chris died, so it's about time I had a new challenge eh? LOUISE: Well just let me think about it a bit longer. You know it's nothing personal against you, it's just I've got to think about what I want in the long run. It'd mean giving up the Woolpack remember? TERRY: OK OK, just don't take too long about it - Alan can't wait forever.
Louise turns her back on Terry to face the optics, she has a concerned expression on her face, while Terry looks slightly put out, burying his head in a newspaper.
Elsewhere, Chas is exiting the Post Office with her back to the street, as she turns around she bumps into Carl causing her to drop her shopping on the floor.
CARL: Oh, sorry! CHAS: Argh... you stupid man! CARL: Look, I said I'm sorry! Here, will this cover it?
Carl hands Chas a twenty pound note, she angrily snatches it off him.
CHAS: It'll do.
Carl tries to help Chas retrieve the items off the floor, but they are all ruined by a tray of broken eggs.
CHAS: Just leave it will ya! I'll just have to go and buy it all again now!
Chas quickly turns to walk back into the Post Office when Carl grabs her arm.
CARL: Wait Chas, I just wanna say... well, there's no need for us to be hostile is there? Can't we at least stay mates? CHAS: No Carl, I've had it with you and the rest of your tribe. You're dangerous, and our Charity had to find that out the hard way. Leave me alone, alright?
Chas rushes through the door, slamming it in Carl's face. Carl obviously appears exasperated and disappointed.
Meanwhile, across the road Terry has just left the Woolpack. He glances over towards Betty's cottage and is surprised to see Matthew being shown in by a smiling Betty. Terry stops for a second but shakes his head and carries on towards the B&B.
Over at the Vet's Surgery Paddy is busy with a cat and their owner when Emily excitedly bursts into the room.
PADDY: Emily!? I'm, erm... a bit busy. EMILY: Paddy, I need to see you quick! PADDY (to owner): I'm very sorry about this, I'll be one second.
Paddy steps out into the waiting area and puts his head in his hands, clearly annoyed.
PADDY: Emily! Did you have to burst in quite so... rudely!? EMILY: I'm sorry! I just wanted to ask you something urgent! PADDY: Well, what is it?! I've got to get back to Mrs. Jacobs before Ginger claws her eyes out! EMILY: OK, how do you fancy a holiday? PADDY: Where? EMILY: France. PADDY: Just us? EMILY: With Mrs. Hope. PADDY (spluttering): Viv?! Emily are you mad? No, no, no, no, no!
Paddy quickly re-enters the surgery room and slams the door shut on Emily, who appears defeated.
Meanwhile, in the Café Donna and Marlon are enjoying a quiet period by sitting at a table with coffee and cake.
DONNA: Ooh I love it when we're alone! Just you and me, like no-one else exists.
Suddenly the back door is flung open and Viv bounds through.
VIV: Coo-eee! MARLON: You were saying? VIV: Oh Donna, I'm glad you're here! Come upstairs and watch me try on all these new outfits - you won't believe how excited a woman can get when she finds one of her ex-husband's credit cards in her knicker drawer! DONNA: Mum?! That's Bob's money! VIV: Well... he doesn't need it! Anyway, he gave it to me to hide because he kept spending on it, so by rights it's mine now! MARLON: Hmm... I don't think Bob would see the same logic somehow. VIV: Oh shut up! Come on then Donna, you're obviously not busy here. Marlon can hold the fort for half an hour.
Viv drags Donna from her seat and up the stairs, Donna has a "sorry" look on her face as Marlon performs a strangulation action towards Viv.
Back at the Woolpack and Louise is clearing some empty glasses from the tables outside. Hearing a door open, she looks over towards Betty's cottage and sees Matthew emerging. He has a beaming smile on his face and shakes Alan's hand, who is showing him out. As he walks through the gate, Louise dashes over to confront him.
LOUISE: Erm, Matthew have you just been speaking to Alan? MATTHEW (smug): That's right, why do you want to know? LOUISE: Oh it's just I heard the B&B was going on the market and with Terry working there... MATTHEW: Well that might not be for much longer I'm afraid, you see I've just put an offer in. By the sounds of it, the B&B will be mine in a few weeks! LOUISE: Oh right! Well... thanks for letting me know.
Matthew walks off with a smile while Louise is visibly shocked by this revelation.
Look out for EPISODE 2 - coming Sunday
(Please tell me what you think so far, I'd love all feedback be it bad or good!)
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Post by giantlady on Feb 26, 2005 20:00:41 GMT 1
It is quite interesting. I must admit, that is the first fan fiction I have read, and I am looking forward to seeing another installment.
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Post by charity on Feb 27, 2005 0:59:22 GMT 1
Thanks Giantlady, glad you enjoyed it!
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Post by charity on Feb 27, 2005 22:20:42 GMT 1
EPISODE 2
Emily is sat at the breakfast table eating cereal when Paddy walks in, seemingly ignoring her.
EMILY: Morning. PADDY: Hiya. EMILY: Are you alright? PADDY: Yeah yeah fine.
Paddy avoids Emily's gaze, trying to make himself seem busy while preparing some breakfast.
EMILY: You know, it was only an idea about the holiday with Mrs. Hope. PADDY: Emily! I don't really wanna talk about it right now. EMILY: But why!? I'll tell her we can't make it. PADDY (turning to face Emily): What?! You actually went ahead and arranged it without asking me? EMILY: Well no, it was more Mrs. Hope arranged it without asking me! I didn't have much choice either! PADDY: You need to learn when to put your foot down Emily, we're not going on holiday with Viv! Well... you can, but don't expect me to join you. EMILY (upset): You're prepared to see me go on holiday without you? PADDY: There's no chance in hell I'm going anywhere with her! But if you want to then fine. EMILY: Right, well maybe I will. PADDY: Good. EMILY: Good!
Emily quickly shifts her gaze down to her breakfast as Paddy storms out into the Vet's Surgery.
Meanwhile, Chas is helping Louise open up in the Woolpack. Suddenly the phone rings.
LOUISE: I'll get it!
Louise darts from behind the bar to reach the phone before Chas does.
LOUISE: Hello? Oh hi Diane! How's Bernice? Oh great!
Chas rolls her eyes and goes back to dealing out the beer mats on the bar.
LOUISE (on phone): OK I'll make sure I tell her. Yeah everything's fine here, don't worry about this place! OK take care, bye! CHAS: That were quick. LOUISE: She was babysitting so couldn't chat for long, sounds like she's having a whale of a time though! CHAS: Glad some of us are... LOUISE: You were pretty quick to answer the phone then, who were you expecting? CHAS: Oh nobody. LOUISE: Not even a certain hunky police officer? CHAS: Oh Denzel's just casual, I'm not bothered about him! LOUISE: Yeah who are you trying to kid? CHAS (angry): Leave it Lou! LOUISE: OK OK... I thought you weren't bothered!?
Chas angrily wipes the bar as Louise gives her a knowing look.
Elsewhere, Matthew has decided to pay Terry a visit at the B&B. He casually strolls through the front door as Terry is clearing tables after breakfast.
MATTHEW: Nice and busy this morning. TERRY: Yeah we've had a rush on! MATTHEW: Usually like this in February is it? TERRY: Well, looking at the books I'd say no but we've had plenty lot of weekend bookings right up until May! MATTHEW: Ah right, so you'd say things were on the up then? TERRY (confused): Definitely, but why the sudden interest? MATTHEW: Oh no reason really! I just like to know fellow local businessmen like yourself are pulling in the trade, I mean the more people in Emmerdale the more chance King & Sons can expand. TERRY: Oh I see, well you should be kept happy for a few months at least! Anyway... best be getting on.
Terry carries some trays into the kitchen and while his back is turned Matthew quickly darts behind the front desk and searches through various books. He stops at one labelled "Accounts" and hides it under his jacket, making a swift exit from the B&B.
Meanwhile over at the Café, Donna is helping Viv with the early morning rush.
VIV: Donna! Full english table six - now! DONNA: I'm going as fast as I can!
Viv scurries round the room with various mugs and plates, dishing them out to customers. Marlon strides through the door with a beaming grin on his face.
DONNA: Marlon!
Donna drops a packet of bacon on the work surface and rushes round to greet Marlon with a big hug. They kiss tenderly as Viv approaches from behind. She grabs Donna roughly and shoves her behind the counter.
VIV (to Marlon): Excuse me! Do not disturb my staff please! DONNA: Mum! It's only Marlon! VIV (sarcastic): I don't care if it's Brad Pitt, when you're in that apron you're working for me! Now, full english table six! MARLON: I'll come back later... DONNA: No, don't go!
Donna comes from behind the counter and removes her apron, grabbing her coat from a nearby hook.
VIV: Where do you think you're going?! DONNA: I've had enough mum, me and Marlon never get a minute to ourselves since you Bob split up! You need to get a life! Come on Marlon...
Marlon looks shocked as he's shown out by a heated Donna. Viv stamps her feet in rage and stomps behind the counter.
CUSTOMER: Full english love?! VIV (shouts): I'm doing it!!!
Meanwhile, Louise is just signing for a delivery outside when she spots a police car roll past the Woolpack. Denzel is driving and he stops at the bus stop, where a twentysomething blonde girl is waiting. She waves at Denzel and jumps in the passenger seat, leaning over to kiss him firmly on the lips before the pair drive off. Louise stands shocked at what she has just witnessed.
Look out for EPISODE 3 - coming Tuesday
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Post by charity on Feb 27, 2005 22:22:01 GMT 1
I'm also thinking of doing a tiny "spoiler" at the end of each episode for example;
Things go from bad to worse for Paddy and Emily.
As readers, do you want these or would you prefer each episode to be a surprise?
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Post by eithne on Feb 27, 2005 22:31:05 GMT 1
Just read Episode One... Do you really need little old me telling you how good it all is? Anyways, 1st story and the King Empire is sure expanding! I am puzzled as to what will happen next with Louise. Will she and Terry put in an offer? And then the Chas/Carl story how will that go? Will they be back together I wonder? 2nd story and I'm guessing it'll involve an affair between Paddy and Viv? Maybe starts in France. Poor Emily.
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Post by charity on Feb 27, 2005 23:00:59 GMT 1
Eithne, you're very inquisitive! Keep reading to see how things evolve! Glad you like it so far!
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Post by eithne on Feb 27, 2005 23:34:49 GMT 1
I'm glad that you are glad that I like your story! I like the idea of a spoiler type thing at the end of each episode, but instead of having a spoiler make it more of a teaser instead maybe. Instead of "things get worse for Paddy & Emily" have something like "a couple finds their relationship under pressure." Then it isn't obvious what is going to happen.
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Post by loulou170388 on Feb 28, 2005 22:31:29 GMT 1
Aww i like it. Tis good
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Post by charity on Mar 1, 2005 23:08:35 GMT 1
Just a quick note to say the next episode will now be tomorrow!
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Post by charity on Mar 4, 2005 17:39:15 GMT 1
Sorry it's taken a long time, I'll definitely write episode 3 tonight!
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Post by sharonh on Mar 4, 2005 19:47:11 GMT 1
Wow! I love the idea of having two stories which eventually come into one. I myself have been writing more of "Secrets" but I'm finding it a little difficult. I seem to have two/three month periods of being able to write and then not. That is called writers block Eithne! ;D Yes, keep it coming CNB I look forward to more!
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Post by charity on Mar 5, 2005 0:52:25 GMT 1
EPISODE 3
Louise makes her way back into the Woolpack, looking thoughtful over what she has just seen outside.
CHAS: What's up with your face? LOUISE: Huh? CHAS: You look like you're trying to squeeze your brain out your ear. LOUISE: Oh nothing! I'm just trying to remember whether I ordered enough spirits for next week. Could you shout Bob through? CHAS: Yeah sure... Bob!
Bob comes darting from the back of the Woolpack excitedly.
BOB: Yes my lovely Chastity?! CHAS: I'm not not your Chastity love! Louise wants you. BOB: Yes my lovely Louise?! LOUISE: Bob what are you doing?! BOB: I'm just trying to spread a bit of cheer about the place, it's been like the Titanic in here this morning! LOUISE: Well we have got work to do! Could you wheel the crates round please, they're round the side. BOB: Right away sweetheart!
Bob scurries around the back again, as Chas and Louise exchange puzzled looks. Chas turns to follow Bob as Louise's look turns to anguish.
In the meantime, over at the vet's surgery, Paddy is sorting through some files with Max when Emily walks in.
PADDY: Blimey, how many lunch breaks does she let you have? EMILY: It were quiet so Mrs. Hope said I could come over. I didn't want to leave things as they were. MAX: Erm, should I...? PADDY: Yeah please mate.
Max raises his eyebrows at Emily before slipping through to the surgery room.
EMILY: OK, I've just come over to try and smoothen things out and to say that I've cancelled the holiday. Mrs. Hope is quite annoyed but she'll have to deal with it! PADDY: You're more brave than me Emily! EMILY: You know, she's really not all that bad when you get to know her. PADDY: You spend all day in that shop with her! Why you'd want to go on holiday with her I don't know?! EMILY: It was a nice gesture, and she invited us! We've not been away for ages, forget it now anyway it's cancelled!
Emily turns and runs out of the surgery, feeling upset. Paddy dashes to the door to call her back but hesitates with a look of guilt appearing.
Over at the King & Son office, Matthew is studying the accounts of the B&B closely while Chloe watches from her desk. Tom walks in.
TOM: What you got there lad? MATTHEW (shifty): Just the accounts from last year. TOM: Oh?
Matthew closes the book and puts it in a drawer.
MATTHEW: A client says we overcharged him by £50 or something stupid, I've had a look and I'll sort it out later. TOM: Just remember to keep on the right side of everyone, especially in these times.
Matthew follows Tom into his office, closing the door on a suspicious Chloe.
MATTHEW: How do you feel about expanding the business dad? TOM: How do you mean? MATTHEW: Well, getting more premises, maybe moving into the property side of things more? TOM: Funnily enough I've been having those thoughts myself. Get me a proposal drawn up and we'll have a chat about it. Nothing sketchy though, I want firm facts and figures and it'll be on my terms OK? MATTHEW (smiling): Sure!
Matthew jumps up from the chair and turns his back to Tom, his smile turning into an angry frown. He opens the office door and steps into the main room, catching Chloe pawing through his desk drawer.
MATTHEW: Can I help with something?
Matthew approaches as Chloe jumps back startled. He slams the drawer shut and stands close to Chloe.
CHLOE: Oh, I was just looking for some... paperclips! MATTHEW: There's some on your desk. CHLOE: Oh god yeah! Right in front of me, sorry! MATTHEW: Next time, ask before you go in my drawers OK? CHLOE (offended): OK...
Matthew gives Chloe a knowing look to suggest he'll be keeping his eye on her from now on, as Chloe shifts nervously in her seat.
At the Post Office, Viv is flicking through a magazine with a bored expression on her face. She eyes up a bottle of vodka on the shelf before returning to her article. Suddenly Donna and Marlon stroll into the shop.
DONNA: Hiya mum! VIV: Oh I wondered when you'd show your face! DONNA: I'm sorry about earlier... it's just like I said, me and Marlon need quality time together isn't that right Marlon?! MARLON: Correct! VIV: It doesn't mean you have to rebel against me! I'm at a time of loneliness and vunerablity in my life. Anything could happen to me! DONNA (rolling her eyes): Like what?! VIV: Well... look what happened to Zoe Tate when she went a few months without a sex life! God forbid if that happens to me, get Paddy to put me down! MARLON: I'll go and get him. VIV: Oi! DONNA (laughing): He doesn't mean it mum! We both really care about you still, but I've got my own life now. I'll still spend loads of time with you, as long as I've got time for Marlon as well! VIV: Ooh really? Because I've got this holiday booked, there's three tickets. One for me, one for you and one for Marlon! Perfect! MARLON (speechless): Erm... I'll have to check my diary... DONNA (excited): Where is it?! MARLON: Second shelf down I think... DONNA: No not the diary, the holiday! VIV: South of France, you'd love it! Sun, sea and plenty of gorgeous hunks parading up and down in skin tight shorts! DONNA: Ahhh sounds great, Marlon let's go! MARLON: I don't wanna be the only bloke! VIV: Well I've asked Paddy and Emily but they've backed out. MARLON: Stay there! I'll go and talk to him, but Donna, don't arrange anything until I get back OK?!
Marlon dashes out of the door while Donna and Viv exchange excited looks
Meanwhile in the Woolpack, Terry is chatting to Louise at the bar.
TERRY: So I'm going to see Alan straight away tomorrow morning with an offer. LOUISE: Terry, are you sure you're doing the right thing? If you wait a few more days I'll try and decide whether I want to go in as a partner with you! TERRY: I need to act now Louise, like I said, Alan wants to sell soon. LOUISE: Well... oh I don't know whether I should tell you this. TERRY: No go on, what is it? LOUISE: Oh you'd find out from Alan tomorrow anyway! Matthew King has already put an offer in on the B&B. Alan's not accepted yet, well as far as I know, but Matthew seemed pretty confident! TERRY: You what?! That scheming... LOUISE: Terry! Don't overreact! Go and talk to Alan about it, maybe he'll change his mind seeing as you've been friends for so long? TERRY: I can't believe them Kings, they've only been in the village five minutes and they're buying everything in sight! No wonder he was round the B&B asking questions, I should've known!
Terry angrily jumps off his stool and marches out of the Woolpack.
LOUISE: Terry, no!
Terry strides towards the King & Son office, where Matthew is coincidentally coming out of the gate with a book under his arm.
TERRY: Oi, you! MATTHEW: Yeah? TERRY: I want a word!
Terry approaches Matthew as they square up to each other, with Louise chasing behind.
MATTHEW: If it's about this, I've had a good look and everything seems in order, thanks for that.
Matthew hands Terry the "Accounts" book and smirks.
TERRY: You thieving sod! I could have you done for this! You're not content with swiping the B&B from under me nose, you want to root through all my business as well?! LOUISE (distressed): Terry, come on it's not worth it! MATTHEW: Well, it'll soon be my business. No hard feelings eh? If you want, I'll keep you on as a chambermaid!
Matthew goes to walk past, laughing as he does. Terry grabs him by the scuff of his jacket and headbutts him violently. Matthew falls to the ground, holding his head.
LOUISE: Oh my god, Terry what have you done?!
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Post by loulou170388 on Mar 5, 2005 23:39:33 GMT 1
gdgd! Am looking forward to it!
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Post by charity on Mar 6, 2005 16:26:41 GMT 1
A new episode should be up tonight, here's a teaser!
Somebody makes a shock decision and there's heartache for one woman.
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Post by demigod on Mar 6, 2005 17:13:50 GMT 1
wow CNB.
Great stuff. Nice to See terry and Matt have a little rivarly about to kick off.
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Post by eithne on Mar 11, 2005 0:45:02 GMT 1
Ouch! Looking into my crystal ball I foresee poor Matthew suing Terry for damages, or maybe just getting his brothers after him!
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Post by charity on Mar 11, 2005 19:25:11 GMT 1
Sorry about the lateness, I promise another episode will be up tonight!
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Post by eithne on Mar 11, 2005 22:26:42 GMT 1
Looking forward to it!
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Post by charity on Mar 11, 2005 23:09:33 GMT 1
EPISODE 4
Terry staggers back towards the Woolpack with Louise in frantic tow.
LOUISE: Terry, was there any need for that?! TERRY: He winds me up so much! He was asking for it! LOUISE: You could go to prison! TERRY: Don't be daft, them Kings wouldn't get the police involved! LOUISE: Well even if they don't, what's to say they won't retaliate?! You've just made things ten times worse!
Louise bites her lip and turns towards the road, watching Matthew being helped up by Carl and Tom, before rushing inside the pub.
Meanwhile, Marlon dashes into the vet's surgery, gripping hold of Paddy as he gives Libby instructions.
MARLON: Paddy! PADDY: Marlon! What's with the man handling?! MARLON: Paddy you and Emily have got to come on holiday with me, Donna and Viv and I won't take no for an answer! PADDY: Woah, woah slow down! MARLON (deep breath): Viv asked you and Emily on holiday right? PADDY: Right - but I'm not going. MARLON: Paddy you've got to! She's just roped me and Donna into it and I need another man there to escape with! PADDY: Marlon, this is Viv! She's a nightmare at the best of times so why would I want to spend a week with her?! Anyway I've told Emily all this so... MARLON (sarcastic): And I thought you were a mate... PADDY: I am but...! MARLON: Then do it for me! Listen, here's the deal - we go to France, we leave Donna and Emily with Viv, we spend all day getting drunk to blank it all out! Plus, think of how much you'd be in Emily's good books just for going. PADDY: Argh...! OK OK! But the first sign of madness from Viv and I'm on the next plane back. MARLON: Me too, so there's no problem! Thank you, thank you!
Marlon kisses Paddy on the forehead quickly and runs out of the vet's cheering.
Over at the King & Son office, tensions are running high.
CARL: How did you let Terry of all people do that?! MATTHEW: It was out of the blue, but rest assured he won't get away with it. TOM: We should report the hooligan to the police! MATTHEW: No way, he'd get a fine and that'd be it. I'll deal with it myself. TOM: Don't you dare do anything stupid! MATTHEW: Have you ever known me to be stupid? CARL: Let me sort it Matt! MATTHEW: No! Now can we shut up about it? He just got hot headed about the B&B, but once Turner sells it to me, I'll get the upperhand.
Matthew turns away from Carl and Tom, a satisfied sneer crossing his face.
Back at the Woolpack, Louise is crying on the sofa in the back room after Terry has stormed outside for a cigarette.
CHAS: Louise? You alright love? LOUISE: Oh yeah, yeah I'm fine! Customers need serving Chas, I'll be out in five minutes! CHAS: I'm worried about ya! I know we don't get on but I don't like to see anyone cry. LOUISE: I'm not crying! I'm just tired! CHAS: Right, right whatever...
Chas turns to walk out but Louise stops her.
LOUISE: Chas wait! CHAS: Yeah? LOUISE: I'm sorry, I didn't mean to be a cow! CHAS: Oh it's alright, come here!
Chas sits next to Louise and gives her a comforting hug.
CHAS: Look, them Kings are scum and they won't do anything trust me! I'll put a word in with Denzel eh, explain the situation? I'm seeing him tonight!
Louise looks up startled at Denzel's name being mentioned.
LOUISE: Oh Chas... there's something you need to know. CHAS: What about? LOUISE: Um, about you and Denzel actually. CHAS: What about us? LOUISE: I've not really wanted to tell you this, but you deserve to know. CHAS: You're worrying me now Lou... LOUISE (sighing): It's Denzel Chas, I saw him kissing another woman this morning. CHAS: You what? LOUISE: I know how it sounds but I definitely know what I saw! A blonde girl got in his car and kissed him. They seemed really close, I just thought you should know before things got to serious! CHAS: I can't believe it, the cheating rat! Right, that's it, I'm going round right now to sort this out.
Chas jumps up, grabbing her coat and strides towards the bar.
LOUISE: No! Chas, wait! Don't do anything you might regret!
In Episode 5, a terrible mistake is made and a nose is put out of joint - literally?
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Post by eithne on Mar 12, 2005 0:04:09 GMT 1
Great fourth episode! Terrible mistake = Chas. Nose out of joint = Terry, I am guessing!
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Post by charity on Mar 18, 2005 22:28:57 GMT 1
EPISODE 5
Chas has taken the bus to Hotton, in search of Denzel. She arrives at his house, quickly striding up the driveway to his front door. Ringing the bell impatiently, she also bangs on the door loudly.
DENZEL (half asleep): Chastity?! What are you doing here? You've woken me up! CHAS: Oh, sorry, didn't realise you were in bed. Bet you didn't get much sleep! DENZEL: What?! I was on nights last night and again tonight. I need to get some rest. Now what's the matter? CHAS: Just let me in!
Chas barges past Denzel, storming into his living room. Denzel shuts the door, looking confused.
Meanwhile, Donna and Viv are excitedly planning their holiday above the cafe when Marlon walks in.
MARLON: Ta-da! Just call me Paul Daniels... DONNA: Eh? MARLON: Paddy's coming! VIV: Oh that's great! Now Emily can join us, Donna! We'll have a right laugh, the three of us! DONNA: I can't wait! How did you get him to come though? MARLON: I just used my persuasive charms... and told him we'd try and distance ourselves from the women a bit. DONNA: What you mean me? Marlon, I want to spend time with you! MARLON: Well once we get out there, I'll try and make Paddy come round to our way of thinking. He'll have Emily anyway! VIV: Yes but Emily will be with me most of the time! I'm not being left on my own... unless I meet a dark handsome French god - then you're all on your own!
Viv runs down the stairs cackling when Donna and Marlon exchange excited looks. Emily is downstairs in the shop as Viv walks in.
VIV: No need to put your bikini away Emily, we're going on holiday after all! EMILY: How come? VIV: Marlon's got Paddy to agree! EMILY: Oh that's wonderful! I'm so pleased Mrs. Windsor! VIV: I know, great news isn't it! Marlon and Donna are pleased, we'll all have such a good time! EMILY: I'm just relieved you didn't cancel it, will you be able to order tickets for me and Paddy though? VIV: Oh yeah that'll be no problem, there were loads of spaces left! I'll get on to them first thing and we can start organising!
Viv scurries back upstairs, giggling excitedly to herself while Emily seems pleased at Paddy's change of heart.
Over in Denzel's living room, Chas is still in a rage.
CHAS: I know you've been hiding something from me Denzel! Now I'm giving you a chance to be honest OK? DENZEL: I have no idea what you're talking about! Have you been drinking? CHAS: No I haven't, I'm stone cold sober and I don't want any lies! DENZEL: There's nothing to tell, I haven't got a clue why you're here! CHAS: Where is she? DENZEL: Who?! CHAS: That two bit tart you were seen snogging this morning! VOICE: I suppose you mean me?
Chas and Denzel both turn towards the living room door to see an attractive blonde standing there.
CHAS: So it is true! You lousy...
Chas takes a swing at Denzel who grabs her arm before she can strike him.
DENZEL (annoyed): Chas!! This is Emma - my stepsister. EMMA: Pleased to meet you.
Emma walks forward to shake Chas's hand, but Chas moves backwards.
CHAS: How do I know you're not lying? EMMA: Well I've got the certificates to prove it... DENZEL: I can't believe you've gone against me like this Chas! You can't have trusted me one bit. CHAS (shocked): I don't believe it. EMMA: You seriously thought? Me and him? God you've obviously an overactive imagination. DENZEL: I think you'd better go. CHAS: Denzel I'm sorry! It was just, I was told... DENZEL: I don't care, just get out! I've had enough of women like you, you think because I'm a copper I'm not the type to get into a serious relationship? Well you're wrong, because I cared about you Chas, but you've ruined it! CHAS: No, wait, just let me explain! DENZEL (angry): I don't wanna see you round here again!
Denzel opens the front door and pushes Chas out onto the driveway, slamming it behind him. Chas looks visibly stunned and starts to sob as she walks back to the bus stop.
Meanwhile at Betty's house, Terry has just entered the living room where Alan sits.
ALAN: Ah, Terry, what can I do for you? TERRY: I need a quick word, about the B&B. ALAN: Ah... TERRY: I know you're on the verge of signing a deal with Matthew King. Why Alan? Why did you cut me out of the loop? ALAN: Terry, it was never anything personal, you've done a great job looking after it, but Matthew was offering more than the asking price and... TERRY: But we've been mates for ten years! Doesn't that count for anything? ALAN: Of course it does, but the more money I can get for it, the better. It's too good an offer to turn down. TERRY: Well can't you let me try and match it? How much is he giving you? ALAN: Twenty thousand more than the asking price. TERRY (alarmed): Twenty thousand?! ALAN: Can you compete? TERRY: You know I can't! To be honest it was enough trouble getting together the asking price. I just can't do it. ALAN: I'm very sorry Terry... you know if it was anything other than money you'd be the first person I'd sell to. But I really do need every penny. I'm going to have to sell to Matthew. TERRY (grim): I understand.
Terry ignores Alan's gaze and mopes out of the house, feeling deflated, but also more annoyed with Matthew. It's now dark and he walks across the road to the Woolpack, hoping for a chat with Louise. As he approaches the entrance, he's suddenly grabbed from behind and forced around the side of the pub. Two men in hooded coats struggle with him, stealing the contents of his jacket and one punches Terry to the ground, while the other kicks him in the stomach before the pair run off into the night.
In Episode 6, there's more violence to come and somebody has to drop out.
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Post by eithne on Mar 18, 2005 23:55:05 GMT 1
I'm not being left on my own... unless I meet a dark handsome French god - then you're all on your own! Hilarious! ;D In Episode 6, there's more violence to come and somebody has to drop out. More violence... more Terry and Matt fighting maybe? I'm guessing Emily drops out of the holiday? Maybe I'm wrong.
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Post by charity on Mar 19, 2005 14:14:18 GMT 1
Thanks for reading eithne! Glad you like, I reckon I should write Viv's scripts on the real program! Keep reading, episode 6 should be up this weekend!
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Post by charity on Mar 20, 2005 13:58:59 GMT 1
EPISODE 6
Terry lies dazed on the ground outside the Woolpack. He struggles to get up, wincing in pain. Zak and Cain are just about to enter the pub when they spot him.
ZAK: Terry? You alright? TERRY: Yeah, yeah I'm fine! CAIN: You don't look it mate, had a bit of bother have we? TERRY: It's nothing! ZAK: Come on, let's get you inside.
Zak and Cain help a hobbling Terry into the Woolpack. Louise is behind the bar serving but rushes round when she sees them enter.
LOUISE: Terry?! What's happened? ZAK: We found him outside, looks like he's been done over! TERRY: Honestly I'm alright, it was just some kids stole me jacket! LOUISE: Oh no! Come through to the back, let me take a look at you.
Terry is escorted through by a worried Louise as Matthew sits quietly in a corner, smirking to himself as he sips his pint.
Meanwhile, back at Paddy and Emily's house, Emily has just returned from work to find Paddy cooking tea.
EMILY: Ooh this is a nice surprise! PADDY: Oh hiya! I thought I'd make your favourite, as way of an apology. EMILY: What do you need to apologise for? PADDY: The way I acted over the holiday and... Viv. EMILY: Well that's all sorted now isn't it? Mrs. Windsor said Marlon got you to come! PADDY (grinning): Yeah he did, the swine! We'll have a good time though won't we? I mean, at least Donna and Marlon will be there. EMILY: We still have to include Mrs. Windsor though, we can't leave her out. She's very delicate at the moment with no man in her life. PADDY: Yeah yeah, I'll be nice I promise! EMILY: Thank you.
Emily kisses Paddy, obviously please at his change of heart. Suddenly the phone starts ringing, Emily rushes to answer it.
EMILY: Hello?... Oh hello Mrs. Windsor... yes... OK... that's excellent news!... next Tuesday?... I'll make sure it's alright with Paddy... yes go ahead and book them... OK... bye! PADDY: What did she say? EMILY: She's phoned the holiday company and they can release two more tickets for us! We leave next Tuesday! PADDY: Ah! I'll have to make sure Max can cover things. He should be able enough by now. EMILY: So we're definitely going? PADDY: I don't see why not! EMILY: Great!
Meanwhile, over at the Woolpack, Carl and Tom have joined Matthew for a drink. Bob is rushed off his feet at the bar where Carl stands.
CARL: Service is a bit shabby in here tonight, where's Louise? BOB: I'm doing to best I can! She's seeing to Terry in the back! CARL (raised eyebrow): Oh aye? BOB: Nooo! Terry's been mugged! Came in ten minutes ago, pretty shaken. CARL: You're kidding, who would've done that? BOB: Nobody knows! Kids apparently!
Carl takes his drinks and sits next to Matthew and Tom.
CARL: Bob's just told me Terry's been mugged! MATTHEW: Oh what a shame. Still, makes me feel a bit better about this.
Matthew points to his bruised forehead.
TOM: Is this anything to with you? MATTHEW: Of course not! On me own doorstep? Give me some credit! CARL: He deserved it anyway, after lashing out at you. TOM: Don't let anyone else hear you talking like that, you know what this village is like for pointing the finger. MATTHEW: Isn't that what you've just been doing? TOM: Well it's just pure coincidence then is it? MATTHEW: Must be.
In the back room, Terry and Louise are having heated words.
TERRY: I've told you, it were kids! LOUISE: Don't give me that Terry, this is the King's work! I've always known there was something nasty about them, especially Matthew. You didn't help matters by headbutting him earlier, this is his revenge can't you see?! TERRY: Don't be daft! They'd never stoop to something like that. LOUISE: Oh I give up with you! We were happy before this B&B business, now it's created a war with our neighbours and even we're falling out over it! TERRY: It meant a lot to me Louise! What am I gonna do with myself once Matthew takes it over eh? I just felt like I was back on me feet and making a go at something when he wades in and takes it all off me again. LOUISE: But it's gone too far! We need to put a stop to this. If it was Matthew who arranged those thugs to jump on you then I think it's best if we just let him get on with things. Anymore interference and things could get even worse! Let's all bury the hatchet now before it gets even more out of hand. TERRY: You're right, you're dead right, but it doesn't solve my problem of a job and a home does it? LOUISE: Look, if it comes down to it you can move in here, you know that! I'd even find work for you. Diane's still not feeling 100% so we need some extra bodies around the place. Don't worry Terry, things will be fine! TERRY: What would I do without you eh?
Terry and Louise smile at each other before sharing a tender kiss.
Meanwhile, back at Paddy and Emily's, Emily is scuffling round the living room, looking distressed.
PADDY: What's the matter with you? EMILY: Oh Paddy! I can't find my passport! PADDY: What?! EMILY: I can't find my passport! PADDY: No I heard you but what do you mean you can't find it? When did you last use it? EMILY: I don't know! It must've been about 8 years ago when me and me dad went to Ireland! I've never seen it since! It must be here somewhere! PADDY: Can't you apply for another one? EMILY: Yes I'd have to! But it'll take too long, the holiday's in five days! I don't think I can come! PADDY: Oh Emily! Keep looking, I'll go and check the bedroom.
Paddy runs upstairs as Emily chews her thumb nervously, scanning the room.
Over at the bus stop, the bus is just pulling away and Chas appears from behind it. Her face is streamed with running mascara, she uses her sleeves to wipe her eyes dry. She folds her arms and walks briskly towards the Woolpack with a look of rage.
Meanwhile, Louise has just gone back to the bar and is serving Eric, while Bob collects glasses.
LOUISE: Anything else? ERIC: Ah, yes, two packets of salt and vinegar crisps please. LOUISE: One second, I think I've got some in the back.
Louise goes through to the back as the door is swung open and Chas barges in. She pushes her way through the busy crowd and marches behind the bar. Louise reappears with the crisps and turns to look at Chas.
LOUISE: Chas? Are you alright?!
Chas snarls at Louise and let's out a strangled scream. She grips Louise by the throat and throttles her against the optics. Louise drops the crisps and tries to push Chas off, but Chas wrestles her to the floor and starts pulling at her hair, while scratching her face as Louise begins screaming. Bob quickly puts his empties down and runs round the bar, pulling Chas off Louise and holiding her hands behind her back. Terry runs through to see what is happening while Louise tries to get up off the floor.
BOB: What the hell has gotten into you?! CHAS (choking with tears): That bitch has turned my boyfriend against me! TERRY: Louise?!
Terry rushes over to Louise who has blood streaming down her face and looks generally disheveled.
LOUISE: Get her out of here now! TERRY: Bob, I think you'd better get Chas out of our sight. CHAS: You won't get away with this you spiteful old hag! BOB: Come on! Let's get you home.
Bob leads Chas round the bar and hands her to Zak and Cain who decide to take her back home.
ZAK: What were all that about? CAIN (laughing): I bet that were many men's dream come true, two busty women wrestling before their eyes! CHAS: Shut it you! Just take me home Uncle Zak.
In Episode 7, a deal is done and an ex appears but it's not a social call...
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